you're white.. get over it.. Your raps SUCK

this guy is an idiot

I hate to say it but your raps suck. I do rap too. You have to really listen to rap to see what everyone is talking about. You have some potential. Your rapping about the wrong stuff. You have to talk about the everyday hustle. Some of that you did you already . You have to talk about violence cus thats what rap is. And some of it has to be funny. Don't give up you just have to focus on what the people want to hear. The formula is Violence and money. Thats it. Also use lots of mediphores. Example>>>> I'll smoke you like a blunt. Or I'll rearrange your face like Mr Potato head. You only see shells when your makeing breakfast. When you rap it has to go right with the beat. Your way off track. You still have to pratice. Your not ready yet. Im not saying you cant you just have to focus a little more. And the biggest trick of all in rapping is combining of words to make it match up to a word you cant rhyme with. For example. surgery<br /> You see surgery write.<br /> Now watch>>>>>heard a me.<br /> I got fucking doctors doing surgery.<br /> mothersfuckers wish the never heard a me. <br /> When you combine words you can keep going on pretty much. Theres no way you can get stuck. Also you can say the same word 3times in arow. Thats it. For example>>>>>>>>>>><br /> Fuck you bitch<br /> fuck dat shit<br /> fuck you and you gotdamn clit.<br /> Don't care who you run wit.<br /> Got damn dumb bitch. Got damn bitch. <br /> This right here sounds good for a chorus.You can keep it. I do this like nothing. Hit me up sometimes. I'm trying to do the same thing. Holla back. Im black by the way. I know what the hell im talking about. Also you have to learn the rap language. Weight is crack if you didn't know. Cake is money. Rock is crack. You have to stay on top with the language. It changes so much. All right son, holla at me.

Sorry son. My email is manup2nogood@yahoo.com OR you can get at me by this email too. Killercatnate80@yahoo.com

I watched your video again. Your right about everything you say at the begining of the video. Everyone claims to be from the streets. I forgot to tell you something. Part of that formula is reality. Most rappers out there lie. Eminem is about the only one that is really open about his life. Maybe if i heard something updated from you a probably would like it. You know linkin park right. Mike shonoda talks about reality. Nothing is made up. Im talking about his rap cd if you hadnt heard it yet. Its called fort minor. I can relate to it. He,s talented. He's not talkin about killing people and moveing bricks. but its still a good cd.Thats all i listen too is hardcore rap. Hes not hardcore but its good enough to nod your head to it. Buy it if you dont got. I want to hear an updated track from you.